Start the lesson by using a green pen or pencil to edit and improve your work from yesterday.
These sentences are ‘sick’ and need help to get better. Can you help? Could you add an adverb?
The boy went towards the fence. He looked through the hole. He was excited.
Now look over the following paragraph and fix any punctuation and/or spelling errors. Then improve the paragraph so it has the following:
Dashes for parenthesis
A relative clause
The correct tense
Up-levelled language (no boring words)
I had got in from school and done my homework. I stood at my bedroom window. I was ready. I had my camera in hand. I then watched in amazement and shock as the tree, that had standed in our garden since before I was born, was pulled from the ground by somefing. Branches and roots ere shaking, green leaves began to be pulled towards a hole and began to be squeezed, again by this unseen force, through the hole in the fence.